Every Tuesday afternoon at 12:10 we go to hip-hop in the hall. Our teacher for hip-hop is called Jess. She is very nice and lovely. Mr Gaffney comes with us. She taught us a dance. My best friend Mele was really good at dancing. First we had we warm up. We would stretch our legs, and we shaked so we could have a rest. We played games and we had challenges. There were winners and losers. The reason why we had hip hop it was to exercise, playing sports, to have confidence,to train,to be strong fit and healthy,and last to skills.We all finished at 11:05.Then she said we had to go to class because the bell rang.
I love the way you have told us why you have been learning Hip Hop, Arvay. Well done.
ReplyDeleteLove It! I love the way you described your lesson at Hip Hop!
ReplyDeleteNext time you could re-read for little mistakes!
Joseph :)
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ReplyDeleteHello,
ReplyDeleteOh wow good for you,I think hips hop is alright because you can get fit and you can learn how to dance.
Jerome
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ReplyDeleteHi Arvay,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you described what you did during Hip Hop. I also liked how you wrote about how Hip Hop isn’t just about dancing, but about exercising and having confidence.
I think you should work on having more detail so you can interest your reader.
Other than that I think you did a great job!
Hi Arvay,
ReplyDeleteYour writing is very good in telling what happened throughout your time at Hip Hop. I also really like how you included your friend. Maybe next time you can include some adjectives to describe more.
Mikaela
Hi Arvay,
ReplyDeleteI really love the way how you explained about what you did during Hip Hop it is really good to see you enjoying your time maybe you can re-read your writing but other than that keep up the good work
Lini
it so lovly
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ReplyDeleteHi Arvay,
ReplyDeleteI really love the way how you told us about what you did during Hip Hop and I could already tell the it was amazing by reading it.
Keep it up.
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ReplyDeleteI really like the way how you explain about what did during the Hip Hop it is really good to me.Next time you could re-read your writing .Keep it up.
DeleteHey Arvay It's Malachi
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have layed your work out
It really looks presentable keep the good work up
Hi Arvay,
ReplyDeleteI really love the way how you explained about what you did during Hip Hop it is really good to see you enjoying your time maybe you can reread your writing.
Good Job!
Mei
Hi arvay,
ReplyDeletei like how you explained you enjoyed hip hop.keep it up.
Hi Arvay,
ReplyDeleteReally love the writing on your hip hop,
Maybe next time before posting to your blog you could read over it and fix little mistakes,